August 2012

Q&A: read pleeasseee? Thankies!!?

by admin on August 28, 2012

Question by Kitty KML ~Kings and Queens~: read pleeasseee? Thankies!!?
Hmm, so i don’t really like this part below, but it fits in with the rest of the book. it HAS to happen.
so…ahhh…what do you think?
(and if you read my last question, it ties into that question. but u probably wont notice how. lol)
the names are Greek, by the way, and it’s in fantasy-medieval-ish times. that’s not a word…oh well.

Zeth read and reread the parchment while I stood in the doorway. His expression was usually serious, but it had always been like a mask that hid what he was really thinking. Now it was different. There was genuine horror on his handsome face, restrained only by his own self-will…he could never express true emotions that would lower his appearance as an unbreakable authority figure. I had never seen him like this.
‘Zeth?’ I asked quietly. When there was no response, I said louder, ‘Zethan!’
He turned around now, almost looking surprised to see me. ‘Veirra. What are you doing up this early, love?’
He was calling me “love” again. That couldn’t be good news.
‘What is that?’ I asked.
He looked down at the parchment, and let out a slow breath. ‘It’s…from a patrol that found your father.’
‘Found him?’ I repeated. As the first shivers of fear rolled down my spine and my stomach gave a strange lurch, I analyzed his expression. ‘Zeth, what do you mean FOUND?’
He gave no response.
I stared at him, waiting for him to reassure me with some kind of miraculous answer to my question. But the look in his eyes said everything.
I clapped one hand over my mouth, eyes burning with unstoppable tears. And yet, as he stepped forward to take me in his arms (which I supposed was meant to be a consolation, but it made me feel worse) and I buried my face into his shoulder to cry, I couldn’t help but feel that tears didn’t say enough.

so this is very raw, fresh from the keyboard, but i’m not sure if there’s a better way to put it? And the character “Zeth” is actually portrayed as the “bad guy” – though there’s no defined “good” or “evil” in my story, he’s the callous leader of the protagonist’s enemies. But he’s not an antagonist, really. That probably doesn’t make sense, but i’m just trying to say that this is a soft moment for him.

I’m going to stop rambling. What did you think?

Best answer:

Answer by Katrina
I actually liked it (I don’t know why, but I always feel prejudiced against liking what I will read on here). The only thing I would say is about the first paragraph:

Zeth read and reread the parchment while I stood in the doorway. His expression was usually serious, but it had always been like a mask that hid what he was really thinking. Now it was different. There was genuine horror on his handsome face, restrained only by his own self-will…he could never express true emotions that would lower his appearance as an unbreakable authority figure. I had never seen him like this.

I just feel like you’re explaining too much here. I think it’d be stronger if you would heed closer to the old “show, not tell” rule of writing. Also, all in all this passage gives the faint air of kinda cliched and cheesy (albeit, which most stories are). I have problems with this too when writing. But that said, this exert still compelled me and drew me in, and I guess most stories can’t be as compelling without that slight element of cheesiness, and as with everything it all depends on how you view it. If you could, though, I would try to tone some of it down and clean it up a bit with editing and just saying less. Definitely keep writing; I would read more of this.

edit: with to without

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Question by : Is Rosetta Stone the best language course suited to me? I want to learn Arabic.?
Is Rosetta Stone the best language course suited to me? I want to learn Arabic…?
Hello all :)

At the moment I really want to learn a new language to broaden my career aspects. I want to start off with Arabic..

I want to make it clear that as a newbie at this, I want to study Arabic so I can speak to people from the middle east where I often travel to (Dubai/Qatar/Syria), I want to be able to understand the news. I have self taught myself to read the letters of the Arabic already but I want to be able to read translations and understand them.

Now, as you can imagine, I have been researching all sorts of language courses. Of course, the one that sticks out the most is Rosetta Stone. However, what concerns me is that a lot of people mention that its really far too ‘formal’. I mean, I do want to learn formally but some people have compared it to the Arabic version of medieval English! I wanted to learn modern Arabic, so I can speak to locals/find my way around different places, but also formal enough so that I can talk to Arabian customers (I work at an airport and it’s a very good skill to have).

I’m just worried because I can only invest in one language course, so I really want to get it right the first time. I mean, I still am in the process of saving up for Rosetta Stone but if it’s the wrong course for me then I should probably start researching some other courses out there?

Also, I’m looking to eventually learn Arabic fluently, almost intermediate/expert level, so the good thing about RS was that it has another course after you complete the beginner (L1) level.

Just want to mention incase someone asks – because this will be a long term and ongoing process – time and money are NOT an issue. I really want to make sure I get this as right as I can, and will put in a lot of effort/money/time towards learning the language as I am very dedicated!

Thank you all for your help, any advice would be helpful, or any reccomendations!

-Poppy :)

Best answer:

Answer by Blue
Yes, Rosetta stone is another excellent way of learning new languages(especially Arabic)

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Nice Renaissance Costume photos

by admin on August 26, 2012

Check out these renaissance costume images:

Minstrels on stage at the Northern California Renaissance Faire – renfaire04
renaissance costume

Image by mlhradio
Northern California Renaissance Faire, Casa De Fruta, CA. October 14, 2007. Photo #4 of 31.

Renaissance Couple
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Pictures from our 2002 Halloween party

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Question by : isn’t the currant jury system just a primitive system we could easily change?
the jury system was invented in medieval england. in a time the authorities represented the king.
so obviously it was the best way to make sure the law system was not just another way for the king to enforce his power. when the founding father created the news judicial system they where very afraid the republic will end up the republic their ancestors created in England after the english civil war. so they took great measures restrict the govorments power, so they wouldn’t have another Cromwell. America has 200 years of free democratic history since then. and today most people don’t view the government as an external ruling force. but as a the people representation.
there for it seems awfully primitive to have uneducated folks as juries deciding in complicated manners that are nothing like what juries had to confront 200 years ago. isn’t time to have professional juries who would be educated in law, rather then stupid hillbillies that can vote a person guilty of murder because they didn’t like the way he dresses.
civil_av8r? why
a professional jury wouldn’t care about politics… a civil jury might

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Answer by Ray J
Berry much so.

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Cool Katana images

by admin on August 24, 2012

Some cool katana images:

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